I love the drawings; the characters are cute.
The chibi character seems to have a small visual issue: a black rectangle floats over her head when she isn't walking down, and sometimes even in her portrait.
The tablet dialogue has a small mistake; it should say, "no one here will replace it for you." Maybe when you get cut, your HP should lower? Mian seems to have a sword and a shield; maybe patients shouldn't have that?
The story leaves too much to speculation. I don't know who the stranger is supposed to be— is he like a demon or something? Why was the protagonist in that facility? Is this some kind of creature containment situation?
You have a strong foundation to create a great story, but in my opinion, something is missing that should tie everything together. It doesn't have to answer all the questions, but it should give the player a sense of fulfillment. Right now, I felt there was an objective, I completed it, and that was it. I think there was a plot twist, but I didn't fully understand it.
I haven't been on this site for a while so I apologize for the late reply! I was actually quite excited to receive a comment on this, while unexpected. I'm a tad bit embarrassed as I know it isn't the best quality. I appreciate the kind view and comments, as well as the criticism which I will take to heart! This was sort of a game made for a school assignment, and it was my first time using RPG maker so I'm happy to receive feedback regarding some issues with it.
Thank you for your kind comment, it really motivated me to continue to try making more games and improving!
If I do post any more in the future, I hope you'll find yourself coming across them as well.
Don't worry about the late reply. I'm happy to hear you are motivated for game development, I suggest you should join a short game jam if you haven't, you will get more feedback and have even more motivation to complete small projects. I hope so too! If I come across your next game I'll review it as well.
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I love the drawings; the characters are cute. The chibi character seems to have a small visual issue: a black rectangle floats over her head when she isn't walking down, and sometimes even in her portrait.
The tablet dialogue has a small mistake; it should say, "no one here will replace it for you."
Maybe when you get cut, your HP should lower?
Mian seems to have a sword and a shield; maybe patients shouldn't have that?
The story leaves too much to speculation. I don't know who the stranger is supposed to be— is he like a demon or something? Why was the protagonist in that facility? Is this some kind of creature containment situation? You have a strong foundation to create a great story, but in my opinion, something is missing that should tie everything together. It doesn't have to answer all the questions, but it should give the player a sense of fulfillment. Right now, I felt there was an objective, I completed it, and that was it. I think there was a plot twist, but I didn't fully understand it.
Good job regardless! I enjoyed it very much.
I haven't been on this site for a while so I apologize for the late reply! I was actually quite excited to receive a comment on this, while unexpected. I'm a tad bit embarrassed as I know it isn't the best quality. I appreciate the kind view and comments, as well as the criticism which I will take to heart! This was sort of a game made for a school assignment, and it was my first time using RPG maker so I'm happy to receive feedback regarding some issues with it.
Thank you for your kind comment, it really motivated me to continue to try making more games and improving!
If I do post any more in the future, I hope you'll find yourself coming across them as well.
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Don't worry about the late reply.
I'm happy to hear you are motivated for game development, I suggest you should join a short game jam if you haven't, you will get more feedback and have even more motivation to complete small projects.
I hope so too! If I come across your next game I'll review it as well.